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Global warming, an increase in Earth's extermal (spelling) temperatues, is a problem we face in our society today. Leaders in science, politics, and business make policies that affect global warming. Leaders should consider issues such as carbon dioxide emissions, increase in gas and oil price, and change in temperature of the ocean's surface before making decisions that will affect global warming. I think that it is good that you recognize these individual issues, but the essay was intended to focus on issues as a whole. For example, all 3 of your issues could be fit into the category "environment". An example of another issue which you could have used could be the cost. This is a good thesis but you do not pick a side, yes you identified what your 3 body paragraphs and issue point will be but you did not say if these 3 issues should persuade leaders to make decisions helping to fight global warming or not. your 3 supports could be categorized into whether it exist or not, or how it effects the environment. you should choose braod topics such as how it effects the economy

The increase in carbon dioxide emissions significantly increases global warming (bleak/boring ). Carbon dioxide is said to be the "primary global warming gas" (source A). If carbon dioxide is such a factor to global warming, leaders may want to make decisions which will decrease carbon dioxide emissions in the atmosphere. Enviornmentalists can, with the help of the government, protect and restore forests which "may be able to offset up to 20 percent of carbon dioxide emissions over the next 50 years." (source A). If a leader wants to decrease global warming it is clearly proven that decreasing the amount of carbon dioxide emissions will contribute to that greatly. Their decisions should involve restoring forests as well in order to decrease the carbon dioxide in the air (good suggestion-elaborate more though ). These decisions will impact the enviornment positively. How is carbon dioxide being released into the environment and how can leaders combat that? You need a transition from carbon dioxide to gas prices.

Gas and oil, which negavtively impact the enviornment are increasing in price (?what?). The prices of oil and gas have "[reached] record levels." (source C.) Sub-thesis should talk about how it relates to global warming. If gas has become more expensive, then americans will have to spend more (money) on it. get rid of this sentence (say why that is bad, what could people do with the monety they save? - buy other things which stimulates the economy). If spending money is not bad enough, gas emissions from cars contribute to global warming. If gas helps global warming stay strong and takes moeny from families, than it would be in the government's best interest to limit its amount or search for new forms of energy. Government officials in eighteen states "have set requirements or goals for renewable energy" (source C). With new difficult ways to get energy government officials can decrease global warming and put money back in american's pockets. Instead of increasing gas prices and icreasing temperatures they can make two positive changes for our world.

Leaders should consider the change in the the ocean's surface temperatures which affects our sea life directly. Many americans rely on seafood to nourish themselves and stay healthy. Not to mention there are several rare speices and resources in our oceans today. Since 1880 to 2004 the temperature has increased almost .3 degrees celcius in the ocean surface. The increasing temperatures in our ocean's surface interfere with our animal's habitats. The animals in the ocean are not able to stand the warmer climates and decrease in numbers because of the temperature. Without the increase of these temperatures we would have more animals surviving in the ocean and a more balanced ecosystem. Leaders can create laws and impact movements which save and protect sea life as well as decrease carbon dioxide emissions which key into global warming.

Each factor whether it be increase in the ocean's surface temperature, carbon dioxide emissions, or oil prices, key into the downfall of our society and the increase in global warming. With so many factors that increase the earth's temperature and decrease the well being of our planet, leaders should consider each piece of information and factor when making decisions which may affect global warming and our enviornment.

Overall this does not seem like a fully devloped essay spell check...

WTF? wheres the focus