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Global Warming In-Class Synthesis Essay

Global warming is a recent issue which has been a hot topic in fields such as science and politics ﻿(The way this sentence is worded it sounds like you dont know what you are talking about) . There is debate over policies and individual issues, and even over the existence of global warming. Many of these issues are extremely controversial, including global warming’s effects on evolution, economic factors of global warming, and the effects which global warming has on the environment, and have mixed results in policy making. **Make sure you pick a side of the argument rather than summarizing both sides. Also, I recommend rereading the prompt** (It seems as if you are attempting to answer the prompt without referencing leaders in an obvious way. Interesting choice, but somewhat difficult to implement without first identifying leaders in the preceeding sentences).

Global warming’s disruption of the process of evolution( ﻿ awkwardly worded ** Yeah. **) shows support for making policies to fix it (Your sentence might benefit if you changed your noun from Global Warming). Spring has been rushed “forward by nearly 10 days worldwide,” as can be seen through the study of bird migration and egg laying (F). Statistically, “global warming from the burning of fossil fuels” is linked “to signs of early spring” (F). Global warming is causing early spring, and early spring is “tearing apart…communities,” says an ecologist at Stanford’s Center for Environmental Science and Policy (F). ** All of these examples are kind of making the same point about GW. **This is because “the global environment is changing so fast that the slow evolutionary process of species adaptation can’t keep up” (F). Overall, global warming is tampering with evolution, and not in a good way. As an environmentalist, I believe that we should respect evolution and allow it to take its natural course, and that it is dangerous for us to try changing it, even if it is accidental. (You should paraphrase, it seems like you are using too many quotes) **More analysis is needed. Remember that you are synthesizing other people's opinions to form your own.** (First person references are generally unhelpful in a synthesis essay. I would agree with these preceeding comments.)

In opposition to this however, I believe that spending on global warming is unrealistic. ** The sudden change in opinion is confusing. Maybe introduce the unrealistic idea in your thesis. ** (Using the word 'this' makes your topic sentence dependent upon your previous concluding sentence, which is usually a bad idea.) The idea that $8 trillion of the world’s gross domestic product could go to “[alleviate] current global suffering” seems like a more logical idea than spending on “stabilizing global warming…to protect future generations” (E). “Only when we [are] sufficiently rich can we afford…[to care] about the environment” (D). It sounds selfish, but the truth is that we do not have much money to spend to repair the world, and we should spend our money on pressing issues first. **Good.** (But have you anticipated the counter arguments against your position?)  “The cost of getting rid of [global warming is] ridiculously high,” and we cannot afford to spend money on it when it “is better spent on solving other problems” (D). I believe that global warming is a large issue, but the truth of the matter is that we do not have the money to solve global warming as a problem in its entirety. However, I believe that steps still should be taking towards stopping future damage, and some money should be spent on repairing some problems. ** Don't say "I believe"; it sounds wishy-washy. State it as a fact. **

The environmental effects of global warming also presents a key issue. The rise of the “world’s average surface temperature” and detrimental “carbon dioxide emissions” are only few of the many ways which the environment is harmed through global warming (A). The Kyoto Protocol policy was created to “help slow the onslaught of global warming and benefit conservation efforts” (A). Over 140 countries joined in this policy in order to accomplish these incredible tasks. It is also important to consider though that reversal of global warming is possible- by protecting and restoring forests, we can “offset up to 20 percent of carbon dioxide emissions over the next 50 years” (A). I believe that the environment is precious and that we must take care of it. By agreeing to the Kyoto Protocol and protecting forests, we can stop global warming, and even reverse some of its effects (Do you have evidence of how effective the Kyoto Protocol is? What about source E?). We are all created Betzelem Elohim- in the image of God- with the task of finishing His work. It is our duty to care for the environment and do our best to fight global warming. (Should include more analysis).

Overall, global warming is a large issue with diverse responses to key issues. Many, like me, have trouble choosing sides regarding policy. Global warming has negative affects on evolution and the environment, but we do not have the economic resources to fix them now. So what can we do in the meantime then? Reduce your carbon dioxide emissions. Try carpooling. Turning off your lights when you’re not using them. Recycling. But most of all, just be conscientious. Because if these issues teach us nothing else, at least they teach us to care. (This conclusion didn't really seem to be a continuation of the argument)